Kingman, Slyther Arnold

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Slyther Arnold Kingman



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THE BASICS ,

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NICKNAMES:
AGE: 28
FORMER HOUSE: Went to a American Wizarding School
OCCUPATION: Professor of Astronomy at Hogwarts
BLOOD STATUS: Pure Blood
ALLIANCE: Unknown
WEALTH STATUS: Formally wealthy, now currently poor
SEXUALITY: Straight (as far as he is aware)
PATRONUS: Snake
BOGGART: Sky falling
MIRROR OF ERISED: A woman, and child by his side.

THE PERSONALITY ,

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Handsome, polight, gentleman, genious, star gazer, loves flying, hard worker, clumsy, terrible potion maker, average spell caster, protective, family oriented, friendly (although shy are first), hates winter (clouds skys so he cant see it), brave, can go without eating (when gets head first into work), work-o-holic (In the bad way at times, forget to sleep/eat/ classes). And hates human tecnology. Fears war, no work, and no love.

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THE HISTORY ,

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MOTHER: Elexina Kingman, home mother, 79
FATHER: Shawn Kingman, ministry of magic, 84
PARTNER: None
CHILDREN: None
SIBLINGS: None
OTHER RELATIVES: All desiesed
PETS: Snake ~ Midnight always with him, and when is not is nearby even if unseen.
HISTORY: Slyther was born in the rocky mountains along the Utah boarder in the US. This is where he grew up as well, in a mansion with plenty of room to grow up and be free. More then any full blooded Wizard would want or even need. Slyther was also a very educated child, his mother and father were very brilliant wizards who got him many private tutors while they were away at work. So from a young age he learned the trade of wizardry. Although in his childhood years before he went to wizarding school he never met but a few other wizarding children, making him exiled in a way to his own kind. There was a nearby reservation of Indians where he went to play and he first met some of his best friends, friends that would keep his going through thick and thin even as he left for school and work after that.

Slyther’s school years where the greatest for him, he was not the most popular or the most brilliant, but he made a lot of friends and very few enemies on top of it. He always excelled, but not to the point where he was the best of the best in his schooling group. This was mostly because of his acquired obsession of the stars, a obsession he had gotten from his father, it was the only thing the two could ever do together or agree upon in truth. Unlike with his mother, who he could never bond with in any way even if he tried. This was because of the fact she had wanted a daughter, and not a son, on top of it she was unable to have any more children. So over the years after his father banned him from there home for not being the best as both his parents had been he simply didn’t go home for the holiday’s anymore, and ever since he was in his fifth year he has not seen his parents, although he has been near his birth home while he has gone to see his friends in the nearby reservation. All of his attempts over the years to regain trust with his parents have gone to ruins as they still resist talking to him even now.

After school he went to live on the reservation with his best friends family for several years while researching the stars before he went and worked a few years with some of his wizarding friends in diagonally. This was right before he went to Hogwarts where he has applied for a job, now he has started for his first year teaching as the astronomy teacher. (I hope)

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THE PLAYER ,

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OOC NAME: AlexBlood
AGE:
OTHER CHARACTERS: Divine Marie Blood and Alexandra Lexi Hound
ROLEPLAY SAMPLE:
At least 250 words please. Can be with any character from any site and it only needs to be done with your first application.

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[WICKED WITCHY]

Hey AlexBlood. First of all Slyther appears to have no personality flaws at all. Being average or no good at something is not a personality flaw and while I'm not asking you to remove those traits, I need you to add a few more negative traits before he can be accepted.
Next, did he attend Hogwarts as a student? If so his family will have had to have moved to Great Britain before he received his acceptance letter to have been accepted otherwise can you just mention he went to a wizarding school in America.
Also, you say that Slyther is wealthy but if he was banned from their parents home does that mean he loses his inheritance or
Perhaps explain why he could never bond with his mother.
Unfortunately the following sentence makes little sense:

Slyther was also a very educated child, his mother and father were very brilliant wizards so from a young age he learned the trade of wizardry and although in hid childhood years before Hogwarts he never met but a few other wizarding children there was a nearby reservation of Indians where he went to play and he first met some of his best friends, friends that would keep his going through thick and thin even as he left for school and work after that.

It's too long and I think you've missed a couple of words also. On that note, before I can accept this application you need to proof read it. I'll take another look over this once you've finished.

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[slyther arnold kingman]

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[WICKED WITCHY]

So you've fixed some of the things mentioned and the app is looking better but there are still two things that need to be fixed up. I still don't understand where Slyther went to school. I'm going to assume he went to school in the US because that's where he was born but if that's the case why all of a sudden did he skip over to Great Britain and apply for a job at Hogwarts? If you could please explain that a little more.
The other thing is I noticed you bulked up his personality section again but the only two real personality flaws Slyther has are clumsy and work-o-holic and even these aren't particularly bad. If you're looking for more ideas of what I'm looking for you can find some more info here. Of course these are just suggestions but what Slyther needs is more weaknesses. Just fix these things and I'll take another look.

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